REFLECTION TASK 2A
Importance of
Health
To continue
life happily is the most important thing. Therefore, health is the most
valuable thing in our lives. If we lose it, there won’t be a meaning of world.
Not only us but also the persons around us will be unhappy. To prevent this
situation, we have to do a lot of things. Firstly, we have to care what we eat.
We need to choose correct foods for our health. We should stay away from junk
foods such as hamburger, cola nugget, cakes with so much fat. Instead of them
we need to eat vegetables, fruits and drink green tea. Secondly, we should try
to do sports. For example, by walking somewhere near is a great option doing
sport. We should attend sport activities such as volleyball, basketball, tennis,
football, handball, and running. Sport provides us a healthy life. Thirdly,
people should feel positive everything around them. That is also one of the
necessary things in healthy life. Because to feel happy inside can destroy
every illness. If we grow hate inside, that will do nothing but loss in life.
To sum up, to live a healthy life links to us, so we need to give importance to
our lives and try to live and healthy life.
Dear Seda,
ReplyDeleteFirstly, you mentioned very beneficial things for living a healty life and expressed them logically.
However I want to make a few comments about your reflection.I think you express your idea thinking Turkish and you should try to write in the sense of English Language.
You have to use ' care ' with of because that phrase is care of sb/sth.You have an also mistake about plural form,it is 'persons'.I searched it and you have to say people if you want to make ' peraon ' plural and you said 'by walking', there is no need to say ' by'.You may try to focuse on parallelism some more.For example it is not true using a verb liike destroy in a sentence that has a positive meaning.
You are already so good if you try to make less mistake, you will be perfect.
Good job...Go ahead like that :)
Hi Seda:) I like reading your writings. I chosed 'health' as a topic of this task, too. I really appreciate your ideas. However, I want to make a few suggestions to you. First of all, I didn't find it much sensible beginning a paragraf with 'to'. Maybe, you could say 'Leading a happy life style is the most important think.' Then in the last parts you should say 'feeling happy can prevent us from diseases.'
ReplyDeleteSecondly, as Betül mentioned you don't need to use 'by' there and 'somewhere near' is also a little weird. You could say ' walking near distances is great for staying active.'
Moreover, I want to mention about an article mistake. You should say 'there won't a meaning of the world.'
Lastly, you should pay more atteniton to the punctuation. After connections you should use comma. For example; 'because, feeling happy.'
I am sure you'll take consider of our suggestions:)
I'm waiting for your other sharings, love:)